Feedback
After showing the project of our devising so far, we were given some really good feedback on our scene. One of the main things was about our boat and how we showed the audience the dimensions of the boat. It was said, that it was very clear that we were on a sailing boat or a small yacht, but the placing and existence of the boom that eventually knocks out Rick in the end, wasn't that well shown by us. We really need to add something to our piece to really make clear to the audience, where the boom is and that it exist in the first place, since it will have a huge effect on the characters. Also, the positioning and blocking should be thought over, ensuring that we take in consideration that the audience will be in a Arena-formation. Right now we have blocked and positioned ourselves to perform the piece in End-On, but we need to make sure that we use our given space efficiently, but also taking in consideration the fact, that we will have audience on 3/4 sides.
It was very important that everyone tried to give their best feedback to other groups, so that everyone's show would be at it's top. Unfortunately, we were quite short on time, and so for the last two groups we had to just listen to our tutor's comments to save time. I still was able to give some suggestions to the first group. What I thought their group had to improve on was establishing the space, since in the beginning of the scene, where they were looking for one of the characters, it wasn't exactly clear where they were or if they were all looking in the same room. Still, the parts in their scene, where they had two people talking to each, and the other two conversing in mute, work very well, and how they transitioned from that muteness was extremely fluid and impressive.
Our group received a lot of feedback also about our ending, with Rick being hit by the boom and the moment after that. Originally, we planned that all of our characters would be so in shock, that they wouldn't exactly know what to do, and so there would be a moment of silence, before my character Vera rushes over to Rick to try to do something. Someone made a comment about it, that it didn't really work, since in a real shock situation it would be more realistic to have people go and try to help, instead of just standing there. This was a good point, in my opinion. Perhaps there should be a brief chaos of people trying to do something, but not necessarily knowing how to help, before Vera would take over and try to calm things down, or rather get her voice heard.
After Vera's speech about Rick's death, the group and her love towards Rick has ended, there is the end bit where Rick's cellphone rings and we find out that Rick has had a girlfriend outside of the friend group all along. When we thought of this, we thought it would be a way to show that Rick truly had something more important than these people he is with on the boat, and also creating a sort of end to Vera's obsession of Rick's, since she wouldn't have had a chance with him any ways. We were also noted about this, than the bit didn't really bring anything necessary to our scene, but rather undermined Vera's feelings and the strong emotions at the end, also completely forgetting about the dead person. Since the feedback, we had a brief discussion with the group, deciding, that it might be for the best to cut out the part about Rick's girlfriend, and perhaps change it so that the silence at the end comes because of the realisation that Rick is actually dead, bringing an end to the original group of friends. This way, we would have more focus on the emotions and the death of Rick.
Many also felt that the character Paige needed to be stronger and more involved into the action happening between the other characters. A good way to get her some more time to shine would be to add more to the part where the group realizes that the poker cards have gone overboard.
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